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“Are you going to kill me?” abruptly she asked when I came with a knife in my right hand.
“If I have to,” I replied with a grin, finding my way to get closer to her.
She raised her eyebrows, trembling in fear. She must have been thinking that this lovely evening could be her last. In a fraction of a second, her eyes were no longer set at the piles of books in front of her like when I entered the room, but were gazing at mine.
I took a small step, while showing off the knife, “Look. Look how sharp it is.”
She gasped, petrified. In an escalating tremor she said, “If, if this is because I gave you brutal feedback on your sixth chapter last week, then… then I’m sorry. Really. Please… please don’t do it. I have little children.”
She must have thought that my smile was a sadistic one like Hannibal Lecter in Silence of the Lamb, but I couldn’t care less. I took another step, sat on the chair, and placed the box I had been holding in my left hand on the table, while she reflexively moved to the other side of the wall.
“What are you doing?” I asked her, puzzled by her sudden movement.
I received no reply but could feel her eyes were glued to the minute of what I was doing.
“Come here,” I said while opening the box.
“Uh?” she muttered.
“Yesterday my friend came down from Sydney, and he brought with him this Indonesian cake,” I said exultantly, while slicing the cake with the knife.
“I’d like to share it with you. You’ve never tried any Indonesian cake, right?”
She shook her head.
“Here. A slice?”
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Ahhaha poor girl, i hope she restored appetite for cake after the shock ;D
Btw i never tried Indonesian cake!
ah, you’re gonna love it, it’s a slice from heaven, hehehe, one day when we have the chance to meet, I will bring you one
I’ll take you at your word haha
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Great stories! Keep up the good work
Thank you very much, Kristin. I am humbly thankful. You are one generous soul. I hope my other stories and poetry are not too disappointing for you. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
Twist in the tale is always welcomed with a smile,as long as it spreads sunshine…
Thank you, Soumyav. There is a good chance that I will be replying to your other comments, so I hope you won’t get bored with that.
Subhan Zein
I surely never get bored with the comments and the replies..
i just love your stories.
Thank you very much for your kind words. I hope my other stories and poetry are not too disappointing for you. Many blessings and much love to you.
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Nice one Subhan
And Subhan, just noticed that clicking on your name from my comments section links to a strange site. Your gravatar works fine though. You might want to correct it.
Thank you, Madhu. I have amended it. I hope it’s working now. Many blessings and much love to you, Madhu.
Subhan Zein
Thank you, Madhu. Many blessings to you.
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Subhan, As always enjoy your writing and the clever twist. As for the character, is it a sad commentary that women really do have to be this watchful of men, even ones we know when they come bearing knives? Surely he knew she was frightened. Did he get off and enjoy … just a little putting that fear into her?
Hi Beth,
Thank you very much. I really appreciate your comment. I didn’t mean to be a misogynist, and I guess it is partially my fault not to be extra careful in developing the context of the story to be interpreted that way. Thank you again, I learn from this and many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
lol I didn’t think you were a misogynist. You are a dear dear human being. just where my head went. much love to you. z
Hi,
I love this part. You really had my imagination spinning and then the closing. Great work.
Ciao,
Patricia
Hi Pat,
Thank you very much. I am happy that the story was good enough for you. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
Brilliance mingled with a superb twist ! Loved it, Subhan ! You are such a gem.
Ah, you always canvased great comments here, they’re a a mirror to your great personality and generous soul. Many blessings and much love to you,, Mashaal.:-)
Subhan Zein
I like it! Yet another side to you as a gifted writer.
Thank you, Renee. You are one generous soul. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
I love it..I let out a little giggle when I reached the end..
It still amazes me at how well your English is..I’m only hoping that when I master my 2nd, 3rd and 4th language, I can be as fluent and knowledgeable as you are with English.
You encourage me with every post I read Subhan =)
Thank you very much, my friend. I am sure that I am very far from perfection, but I am humbly thankful with your comment. You are one sweet friend. I hope your days are full of light. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
Güzel ziyaretin ve yorumun için teşekkür ederim
benim değerli arkadaşım Subhan Zein
mutlu bir pazar diliyorum….sevgi ile kal
Thank you, Secil. Many thanks for your kind wish. I hope you are well too and that life is treating you well. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
I didn’t think you would kill her but you never know.
Hi Karmic Diva,
No, I wouldn’t kill her. It’s just a story, the climax was meant to appear due to misunderstanding. But yeah, apparently it doesn’t work that well, and this means some work need to be done. Thank you for your gentle comment, many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
Wonderful and clever twist, Subhan! Loved it!
Lauren
Thank you, Lauren. You are one generous soul. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
We want a part 2 too!
Please bear with me a little while. Hope I could come up with something good in the future. Blessings to you.
Subhan Zein
Hahaha……..Almost took the poor gal’s breath away, or it could have been a heart attack!Maybe an overdose of suspense novels, or creepy horror films.Probably the pile of books!
Another thing, the gal doesn’t trust the guy too much!
Hmmmm…….The world is so strange and unpredictable, you never know.
Seems i’m becoming a critic!:0
Thumbs up, WELL DONE!
Thank you, my lovely friend. With your comment, you are one generous soul. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
Nicely constructed
Thank you, Laurel.
Great to see you back. Hope life is treating you right and the light of happiness remains bright in the realm of your heart. Many blessings and much love to you, Laurel.
Subhan Zein
Editors probably have good reason to fear cranky writers. Thanks for intrigue, twist ending and great story telling.
Hi Judy,
Thank you. I was actually referring to an academic supervisor here, but yeah, an editor could do. Haha. Thank you again, many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
Nice twist of the knife story.
Hi George,
Thank you, I am humbly thankful. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
A mind bender.
Ah, I am not sure whether I deserve the compliment, but I am humbly thankful. Many blessings and much love to you, my friend.
Subhan Zein
Very Good! Thanks for sharing.
BE ENCOURAGED! BE BLESSED!
Thank you very much. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
This made me shiver, Subhan, and think about trust. I’m glad I came to see you this morning x
Ah, really, Julia? I hope you came here and found something good. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
Ah, the suspense of it all. Well done my friend. Cheers Lorelle ha ha
Hi Lorelle,
Thank you very much. You are a sweet lady. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
it was a good read…nicely done…
Hi Jigme,
Thank you very much for your sweet comment. Many blessings and much love to you, Jigme.
Subhan Zein
Well done, Subhan! I was completely caught off guard by the cake!
Hi Jim,
Thank you very much. I am very much flattered. Many blessings and much love to you, Jim.
Subhan Zein
You are most welcome Subhan!
Good one Subhan…
What if she have got scared to eat the cake also???… I wanted the story to continue a little more longer
haha, thank you, Pragati. Yes, I may need to develop it into a longer one, but thought that it’s enough for now. Maybe next time, I’ll make it longer. Thank you for your sweet comment. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
Hahaha. Love this. Very clever story. Now I’m wanting a slice of that cake.
Hi Adinparadise,
It’s you again, with sweet commentary. I am not sure whether I deserve the compliment, but I am humbly thankful. Unfortunately the cake is gone, but there’s some Vietnamese cake left in my fridge, if you like. I’ll bring it down to you, for sure, hehe
Subhan Zein
Sounds really yummy. I’d love that, if it were at all possible.
Loved it!
Hi JaseR75,
Thank you very much. I am so glad that you liked it. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein
A very good story development, my friend!
Hery
Thank you very much, Bli. Apparently there’s still work to be done. Many blessings to you.
Subhan Zein
subhan, sydney dari canberra jauh ga, temanku mau ke sydney, kamu bisa ketemuan sama dia kah?
Jarak Canberra-Sydney adalah 3 jam perjalanan. Aku tidak ada agenda ke Sydney bulan depan atau November, karena aku di sini inshaallah. Tapi kalau temanmu ada rencana berwisata ke Canberra, inshaallah aku akan senang menemaninya jalan-jalan.
Subhan Zein
The treat in the end made up for the fear in the beginning
Haha, that’s right. Thank you, Rosy. You are one generous soul. Many blessings to you.
Subhan Zein
Ha ha, Subhan. My first thought was: Is Subhan writing a novel..? I haven’t seen anything that would suggest that in his latest posts… Second thought: He’s kidding us…..
And you were/are…. Very funny, and a very good read, Subhan.
btw: Yes, please. I’d love a slice….!
No, this is not a novel. I just thought that I was going to give a try to this kind of genre, and apparently there’s still work to be done. Anyway, thank you very much for your sweet commentary. It’s a reflection of your generosity and kind soul. Many blessings and much love to you, Carolyn.
Subhan Zein
ha ha ha oh man Subhan this was brilliant loved how you developed it…
Aw, ‘Brilliant’! Thank you! I am humbly thankful. Many blessings and much love to you, Soma.
Subhan Zein
It is a very interesting story,I don’t blame her for getting scared ,who wouldn’t,someone with a knife in hand and an unrecognizable smile can scare the daylights out of you.I’m glad it had a good ending.
Thank you for this.
Hi Ranu,
Thank you very much for your comment. I really appreciate it. Many blessings and much love to you.
Subhan Zein